the opening really needs work- it neither answers the question or introduces the case study. I like the fact you have gone for an interesting first line but it needs to the basics too.
more depth + detail to each point / paragraph and more examples from a variety of media texts.
LR re-write the opening paragraph
"feral youth";"the lost generation" and "broken Britain" are words that are currently thrown around by the media since the London riots and arguably this event has been the most depressing and un-balanced picture of black youngsters the world has ever seen. however, is an event like this black and white or is it more complex than first construed and are all representations like this simply negative or positive or is the representation more complex than it may first appear.
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